In The Valley

For today’s Flash Fiction Friday, I’m doing the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers prompt again. You really do need to make it over there if you haven’t done so, yet. It’s a lot of fun. Thank you again to Priceless Joy for this week’s prompt.

This one is a continuation for last weeks’ prompt: The Journey Ahead.


Photo provided by The Storyteller's Abode via FFfWA
Photo provided by The Storyteller’s Abode via FFfWA

We squeezed through the narrow crevice behind the waterfall and stumbled out into a vast and open valley. I pushed myself ahead of Megan and the children, rifle and machete ready, and scanned as far as my eyes could see in every direction.

I didn’t see it. No, no, no! Where was it? It was supposed to be right here!

“John?”Megan’s voice shook with fear.

“Maybe it’s just behind that clump of trees in the distance.” I pointed west to a line of pines that sat near the edge of distant foothills.

That’s when I saw the boulders. Two in the middle of the valley. My knees hit the ground as fast as my heart hit my stomache.

Not here. Not now. We had come so far. So far.

“John?” Megan asked again. She saw the boulders.

“Turn around. Back through. Go now.”

And the buzzing began to fill the air.

Clocked in at 150 words this time.

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13 thoughts on “In The Valley

  1. Russell, this story is excellent. I have asked the FFfAW participants not to do continuations for the challenge. Too many people were doing them and it became too confusing for our readers. I don’t mind continuations as long as each segment can stand alone as well. (Please refer to guidelines for more information). Do you need for me to link up your story for you? I’ll be happy to do so. Thank you very much for participating with FFfAW challenge!

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